支招小作文(180) I 静态表 五个国家女性职员&管理者的比例

April 11, 2024

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[2024/ 4/ 7] The table below shows the percentage of women in workforce and management in five countries in 2022.

【主体段分段】：

方法1：按照 <竖列比较对象> 分段（workforce一段，management一段）

方法2：按照 <左右差距> 分段（本篇文章采取此种分段方法）

【开头段】

The table compares the proportions of females working in the workforce and at managerial level in Australia, Egypt, Siri Lanka, Japan and United States for the year 2002.

【概述段】

It is clear thatonly in Australia and US, almost equal numbers of women worked as ordinary professionals and managers.In the rest three countries, there were more females engaged in workforce than those taking managerial roles.

思路要点：

- Australia和US：workforce和management的比例相似

- 剩下三个国家：workforce>management

【Body 1】

Looking at the information in more detail, we can see thatthe gapbetween these two groups of people was not obvious in Australia and United States.In the former country, female managersslightly outnumberedfemale workers, with the difference of only 1%.By contrast, a different pattern could be seen inUS, with 46% of women working in the workforce and 43% in management field.

思路要点：Australia + United States（左右两边差距小）

- Australia：management轻微>workforce，差距为1%

- 相反，United States：workforce轻微>management,分别占比46%和43%

【Body 2】

A larger gap between these two occupations could be found inthe rest three countries.This is especially true forSiri Lanka, where the proportion of female workers was 41%,almost 5 times as large as the figure forthose who occupied managerial positions.Likewise,only 17% of Japanese women worked in managerial level,while48% were employed in the workforce.Besides, there were12% of female managers in Egypt, and this figurewas nearly half ofthe figure for those working in the workforce.

思路要点：剩余3个国家

- 左右两边差较大

- Siri Lanka：workforce是41%，几乎是management的5倍

- Japan：workforce→只有17%，但是management→48%

- Egypt：management→12%，大约是workforce的一半